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THE stroyline of my building

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The story of my degrading eyesight.
Once, not so very long ago, some dude decided to sign up on this forum with the intention of sharing a little tale he came up with.
Being pure hearted and interested in the affairs of our members I took to reading his topic.
It wasn't long untill the lack of subdividing alinea's, proper grammar, horrid spelling along with syntaxes that made no sense at all started to take their toll on my retinae.
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Here's mine:
Once Upon a time, I Didn't give a shit. Still don't. The End.


In seriousness:
Wut?
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DreamingInsane wrote: In seriousness:
Wut?
Apparantly the dude made a build, and thought it was so good he just had to butcher the english language out of reverence for his creation.
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Sanjar Khan wrote:
DreamingInsane wrote: In seriousness:
Wut?
Apparantly the dude made a build, and thought it was so good he just had to butcher the english language out of reverence for his creation.
Ah, so he google'd synonyms minecraft story made by a fanatic.
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1. Punctuation
2. Capitalization
3. Text division (paragraphs)
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I'll see you on the Dark Side of the Moon

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Name, you need to meet up with Ninjawolf. You 2 would make quite the couple.

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name111111(lotta 1's), i thought your grammar was excellent. So what if I couldnt read half the story, and there was no picture to go along with it, (I only read picture books). I could still feel it... in here *points to right side of my chest, because I don't know where my heart actually is*
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Not a retard wrote:Once upon a time, a long time ago, the world was corrupt by evil. The lands were burning and the world in despair. God had to do something to change the world and to make all well again. He sent down a man by the name of Jacob to save the land, but the devil wouldn't let him take his evil work away.
The devil sent minions, fire guards and even fire zealots but nothing he threw at Jacob could stop him as his soul was too pure for any evil to corrupt him. Soon Jacob came face to face with the devil and they both fought until finally the devil slashed at Jacob with his staff. This caused Jacob too fall down as he saw his life fade away. However, God did not want this to happen, so he sent an angel to come to and revive Jacob. The angel also gave him a gift from God; a holy sword. With it he slashed the devil with ease and slayed him.
The world was pure again, but in a nearby town there were devil worshipers. They disguised themselves as normal people, but the whole town was corrupt. Under the town there was a dark, dark secret. The worshipers had rebuilt hell and started to summon the devil back to life! A spy who lived in that town told prayed to God and told him the bad news.
Upon this, God himself came down his stairs of life and pure good, and he confronted these evil beings, imprisoning them in hell.
They still remain there to this day in the new hell underneath their abandoned town, and remaining in place are two stairways. The first leads to the skies, which only the good and pure of heart can ascend to live with God, and the second leads down to hell, where God banished the heretics to a life of torture.
I kinda fixed it, but I still see no relation whatsoever to Minecraft or just even...life in general.
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name1111111111 wrote:.....
He fixed it himself! MUCH better!
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Let's start our story. I'll begin the spamfest, you guys just add a word, copying the previous sentence (with articles or prepositions) :P

Her
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kattoo wrote:Let's start our story. I'll begin the spamfest, you guys just add a word, copying the previous sentence (with articles or prepositions) :P
You're on!

Her face

(In relation to OP: It's a nice story! (At least the one I read from Ollie's post))
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Xesdra wrote:Her face
Her Face Was
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DreamingInsane wrote:
Xesdra wrote:Her face
Her Face Was
Her face was potato
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Her face was potato, and
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Ollieboy wrote:Her face was potato, and
Her face was potato, and potato

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xKoreaNx wrote:Her face was potato, and potato
Her face was potato, and potato, so

(You're a troll Korean, You almost ruined it.)
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when she
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when my she rotated
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You can't just CHANGE the word if you don't like it :P
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I seem to have completely disregarded Helio's post
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when she rotated gleefully,
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when she rotated gleefully, the potato
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when she rotated gleefully, the potato became
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when she rotated gleefully, the potato became quite
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Her face was potato, and potato, so when she rotated gleefully, the potato became quite embellished.
I'll go where ever my mind takes me.

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Kattoo added two words :angryskeleton:
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And you broke the chain, besides if you read my post - I said you should add proper prepositions and articles, hence the two words >.<


Her face was potato, and potato, so when she rotated gleefully, the potato became quite embellished. Encouraged
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